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11 November 2006 @ 06:45 am
F O R E W O R D  




D A R K D A Y

To all the terrors of the world outside - I hold a light.
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F O R E W O R D

                             by Edward Prima


 

Whenever a good man is murdered, we must ask ourselves, ‘why?’

Steam lifts off the rock, rising with the moisture of the forest below. A deep crack runs the full length of the cliff face separating the millennia with a reddish band of oxidized iron. Sitting snugly in the safety of this fault, rock-dwelling lichen unfurl the last of their arms to absorb the mists. Pores open, water condenses and the chill of the evening wears off until the air is dry.

Picon’s jail clutches desperately to the cliff with metal rods that strain to hold its heavy walls there. The pink rock sighs as the morning light seeks out its secret places. The day is warm already, wiping away the glistening edges of rock which unwisely overhang. The endless dripping that once tormented imprisoned minds still falls rhythmically from a crevice untouched by the world.

Many hundreds of feet underneath the jail, the Valley of the Gods converges in a dense hole of green. Below this, the ravine floor is dug deeper by the famous River of Blood. Billions of bacteria live in a continuous feeding frenzy amongst the nutrients leaching from the plains above where the old rock and sand wither, unwillingly giving of their life. As a result the river is stained, concealing this world of punishing hunger below its current which progresses between the valley walls and ends by falling below the ground, hiding itself away under the earth.

The violent green of the valley – alien to a planet known for its deserts, squints as the sun rises enough to fully illuminate the cliffs. The jail weaves around one of the vertical rises, hanging between the two worlds, part of nowhere with a view to die for.

Silently, a flock of white birds fracture the sky. They clear the edge of the cliff and descend into the valley to retake their nests. Nothing speaks here; even the insects mute their calls in fear of the surrounds. Despite the beauty, there is something dark in the location of Picon’s Jail. Perhaps it is the way the prisoners can feel freedom through the walls or smell it on the rain as it shatters over the bars of their cells giving life to the walls. Moss spawns in the late summer heat when the excess blood runs; sculpting the walls like the river cuts the valley below. Something not quite natural marks the corner in one of these cells. With a bit of imagination, you can make out the inscription.

‘Why?’


Since its desertion, the stains on the walls of the jail have dried, fading with the passing of the sun. The moisture has been soaked hungrily back into the porous façade which screens everything we want most to forget. Rock is a poor custodian of human deeds. Oddly, it is fond of human thought and remarkably permanent in its plot to mock humanity with a question that stubbornly remains etched in its surface, immune to all forms of erosion. I have no doubt that we will be punished for its permanence. Our civilisation shall crack around it and crumble into its whisper.

This I am willing to give you my word on: the skies over the Twelve Colonies will crash as the waves do about the sand while our poor heads search the bleak emptiness of space for an answer. If there is any truth left, it is that our own extinction may come to pass but the question and the monument it serves to human reason, will remain. A man found it worthy in his final hour and with many more breaths than he, we might ponder it just as stubbornly as the rock but find no answer.

Today is the fifteenth anniversary marking the disappearance of the Eighteenth President of The Colonies, Paul Stravos. We cannot say with any certainty whether he is alive, buried from sight or walking amongst us. Despite the lack of facts, we have been left with rumours – smears of truth that, from time to time, drip off the hands of the Caprican government. From the little we have, a shaky truth emerges, forcing us to stumble into the ever darkening world of those last few weeks.

The Colonies have long ago come to terms with the loss of their President – what renews the buzz at this time every year is the mystery itself. I am here to tell you one truth about your lives; you live with a government that is willing to kill to protect its secrets. More than that, they will kill these secrets to protect their lies.

I must confess that the creatures in this story are at best, shadows. Its plot is primly one of whispers passed between those who would listen. However, the truth it contains seeps from these deceitful fabrications to emerge onto the page like the sweet nectar of the gods pooling into the glasses of politicians, intoxicating and pure.


 

 
 
 
sidhe1: sad marysidhe1 on November 14th, 2006 04:07 am (UTC)
Your imagery is just so vivid and visceral. It's lovely, and scary. This is also an incredible prologue for Dark Day, a good teaser into the mystery of the President's disappearance. It feels sinister without resorting to gore right away, if that makes sense. It doesn't really make sense to ME, but I know what I'm trying to say. :) It's almost like Hitchcock, freaking you out with music and lights rather than with actual action. I will stop now. I'm making no sense...
ellymelly: it is only your soulellymelly on November 14th, 2006 04:32 am (UTC)
*dies of shock* a comment! lmao

It's okay, you make perfect sense and I'm thrilled you picked up on what I was trying to do because I wasn't sure if it was clear or not. It's frightening starting this fic and you have no idea how much constructive feedback helps. *hugs tightly*
sidhe1sidhe1 on November 14th, 2006 04:41 am (UTC)
Yay! I'm glad it helped, hun. I really am enjoying the bit you put up so far, and I can't wait to read more. I really, really love the idea of writing Dark Day. I think you're brilliant. It can definitely be frightening to start a new fic, especially if it's a little outside what you normally write. I don't know if that's the case for you since I've only read BSG fics and the one about the butterfly. But so far you're doing great. Feel free to spam me with questions if you need a sounding board or anything! Email I check most often is kristen dot mcquinn at phoenix dot edu. *hugs tightly back*
ellymelly: drunkellymelly on November 14th, 2006 05:37 am (UTC)
Don't worry, the questions will come lmao!

BTW I made you a mod, (just so i don't have to moderate anything you post lol) is that okay?
sidhe1: marysidhe1 on November 15th, 2006 05:06 am (UTC)
Sure, that's fine. I have no idea really what that means, but meh. :) I'll probably only post here if I see you've updated something but didn't send me an email about it, most likely. *hugs*
ellymelly: drunkellymelly on November 15th, 2006 06:28 am (UTC)
It just means that i don't have to approve your replies that's all. (ie, they just appear like they're doing now because i'm monitering the community)

Joell: goddessyetanothermask on November 21st, 2006 01:04 pm (UTC)
Wow, this is incredibly well written. I love the attention to detail and the way you've built up the air of mystery and suspense. Can't wait to read more!
ellymelly: adama's gonna kill meellymelly on November 25th, 2006 08:04 am (UTC)
wow thank you! I've finally got my internet back so chapter one should be up soon. *looks at betas* you'll get it soon! Even if i have to re-type it on this computer for you! lol and also, i'm reading your email now so sorry about the delay *sigh* internet *cries*
Joell: laura glassesyetanothermask on April 12th, 2007 07:49 am (UTC)
Wow, this is even better than the first prologue. Your attention to detail makes this writing very emotionally moving. Just out of curiosity: who is it that's speaking? Is it Edward Prima or one of the characters?

P.S. Can you take me off the beta list? I feel guilty getting credit for something I haven't done, especially after you were such a great beta for me.
ellymellyellymelly on April 12th, 2007 08:07 am (UTC)
the prologue is by edward prima :D i should probably say that lol! see, you're beta'ing *grin*

But if you like, I can take you off the list (and mailing list?)
Joell: loves a good danceyetanothermask on April 12th, 2007 08:10 am (UTC)
I would still like to be on the mailing list, but please take my name off the chapters I didn't actually beta.
ellymellyellymelly on April 12th, 2007 08:14 am (UTC)
most certainly. :D
nyuszi on April 14th, 2007 09:01 pm (UTC)
i haven't gotten around to reading the next chapters yet, but this is amazing. can't wait to start reading.

do you mind if i ask what made you come up with the idea to write something like this? it's totally cool, but how did you decide? and how did you come up with the story?
ellymellyellymelly on April 14th, 2007 10:21 pm (UTC)
new reader~! *hugs to death*

uh... basically i thought, 'dardkay, that's a cool title' lol.

I knew it was supposed to be a mystery and i'd never written a mystery before so i thought it might be fun. It's not your usual fanfic though, i must admit!

As for the story, i had this opening scene in my mind along with the closing (won't tell you, it will spoil it) so then i had to come up with a way to get there.

I started off by accumilating a team of betas (whom i love *heart*) and we started bouncing ideas off each other. Bascially we started with the concept of a murder so we needed a detective. We settled on Vince Moretti after a lot of argument. Shorlty after we decided the first lady was going to be the murdered person and the story evolved from there. It's hard to explain - there were a lot of emails back and forth of us bouncing plot details off each other.

to tell you the truth, i have no idea how the story it formed - it just evolves. There's a master plan but the particulars change as we go.

... that was a very inarticulate way of answering the question! not sure if it helped at all lol!